Ode № 108519

You are my very Heart

by donmiguel1960

Member since 2004 · Posted 15 Jul 2004 · 2 comments

You are my very heart rushing life through my days. The most essential part finding way in a foggy haze. Your very reflection brings forth forces unseen. A desired affection calming the storm, bodies serene. A tender gaze and devoted gifts are pictured by all. In zeal your coated sending your peace to the very small. The glory has come in knowing your there. Sweet as a plum with beauty so rare. My love, my wife Iâve missed you so much. Waiting all my life for the mend of your touch.

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[7] edwardo 15-Jul-04/10:20 PM Reply

i like that the last line is out of meter and out of rhyme, however the ametered fourth line feels somewhat awkward; thematically, no comment, a classic ode

[n/a] donmiguel1960 › edwardo 16-Jul-04/8:54 AM Reply

Thanks for your coment. You seem to really understand the art. is this your major?