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Dylan's Odyssey. (Free verse) by Don-Quixote
Like Dylan said Mr Candyman sing a tune for me cause I'm jitter-janglin, succumbing to some senseless primal desperation that's risen from my hidden discontent-- Sooth me with that tangerine grin, cherry lips whistlin some tune that accompanies the frenzied sway of my dreams, and subtle in it's mission, easing the consequent tide so it can tuck itself beneath the sands of my brainsky. Like Dylan said Mr. Candyman, you're what the sirens sang in claxoned seduction to brush aside a sailors worried thoughts persuading him to resign to their melody's non-existent current before embracing the jagged rocks of mortal cancellation. Like Dylan said Mr. Candyman, cause of you I heed not the skies monitory constellation.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.75
Weighted score: 5.089402
Overall Rank: 6357
Posted: July 8, 2004 6:47 AM PDT; Last modified: July 11, 2004 12:25 AM PDT
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[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 10-Jul-04/5:27 AM | Reply
couple few interesting words in there.

Brainsky
Monitory

would make a nice ditty I think[sky].

[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.162.36 > Shuushin | 11-Jul-04/12:24 AM | Reply
Ditty? hrmm.. maybe, but I don't think I'd be the man to do it.

btw:
Monitory, adjective - def: Serving to warn.
[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > SupremeDreamer | 11-Jul-04/5:42 AM | Reply
Yes, yes - looked it up already. thanks.
[7] MR Blobby @ 62.31.23.30 | 11-Jul-04/12:54 AM | Reply
Blobby blob?
[8] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.159.205.139 | 13-Jul-04/7:02 AM | Reply
Tambourine man and candy man mean the same thing so this works for me.
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