|  |  | Mm, Shoes... ? (Free verse) by fevriere
 
 I creep in the shop, pigeon-toed, eyes bird-narrow
and voided like black beads, you see, 
and my hand floats onto the halfmoon, floats like powdered
dust.
There's nothing much to look at;
nothing much
and riches only glitter once in fall.. If at all.
Sadly, drifting homewardly
I see I am freckled and pied, more cushion-curved than gypsy chic
So I thieve the colours of the night-butterfly, 
the insipid taste of eye-candy.
I am raw sugarcane for the eyes. 
I am a day-moth, who floats
for a moment in the air, 
like the eye-shadow motes palely-bright
that glisten, that sink slowly, 
that are barely air-resisting, insubstantial in flight. 
 
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	Arithmetic Mean: 5.0Posted: July 7, 2004 10:26 AM PDT; Last modified: July 9, 2004 2:17 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0
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Could do with a bit more happening with them e.g my pidgeon toes creep..., my bird-narrow eyes watch... etc.
From line four onwards this is pretty good.