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Ayudame (Help Me) (Free verse) by | Broken |
Looking up at the deep blue sky Wondering things that happened and why Sitting down trying to figure things out But ended feeling guilty and wry I was cheated, I was lied I was stupid, I cannot fight It hurts and I cried How I wish I could hide The truth is hurting me And so does the lie I was stabbed by a sharp knife Oh how I wish I could die I can't continue my life living like this Drowning in an ocean full of sorrow Burning in an inferno of lies Living like a lifeless dummy .. There's a way out to all of this Deep inside .. I know it It's just that I can't figure out what it is Ayudame .. God Ayudame.

Up the ladder: The huntsman's secret
Down the ladder: Of Dreams and Obscurity

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.3
Weighted score: 6.15
Overall Rank: 1070
Posted: June 26, 2004 11:02 PM PDT; Last modified: June 26, 2004 11:02 PM PDT
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Comments:
[8] DR Limerick @ 213.48.74.44 | 26-Jun-04/11:48 PM | Reply
kum und sit on my sofer let ust talk about diz
2 limerickes a day should maken you feel mutch better!
[8] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 27-Jun-04/4:50 AM | Reply
the use of Ayudame is the best part of this; elevates it.
[9] arduinn @ 165.21.83.240 | 27-Jun-04/6:28 AM | Reply
first line of second stanza.. i think it shld be 'lied to'...

but as i said before... i like it...

agree with shin shuu tt the use of said word made it better...
[8] zodiac @ 65.161.41.48 | 27-Jun-04/7:02 AM | Reply
Why on earth are you saying 'ayudame' instead of 'help me' or even 'tolong saya'?

Is it because, since you don't speak Spanish very well, 'ayudame' sounds deep and kind of beautiful, while the English and Malay versions sound bland and vaguely adolescent?
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