poemranker ::SIMPLE by shazpen

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Free verse № 106592

SIMPLE

Member since 2004 · Posted 26 Jun 2004 · 1 comment

the lights coming from beneath hood strewn entrails of burden slushed in jet stains all the steps of a mountain well down a dream marked her ass oh god forever up and in the window a tree trunk of a nerve all cats dogs and possums easy jumping paths through the clear air swerving around dusty and solid raised slaughtered cried every night-they move through and pull at your reflexes a lost day lost to memory only a resisdual that comes up in dreams and I can`t remember if I dreamt it or it really happened or theres a messenger from some other place warning the wrong dreamer about unavoidable disaster the striving shock panic and rage of an escape artist`s last performance or the suicide of an obsessive in the headline of a man awaiting execution

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[9] Shuushin 26-Jun-04/7:20 PM Reply
quite nice - I would have made a few different line break choices, but really - a small thing.