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SIMPLE (Free verse) by shazpen
the lights coming from beneath hood strewn entrails of burden slushed in jet stains all the steps of a mountain well down a dream marked her ass oh god forever up and in the window a tree trunk of a nerve all cats dogs and possums easy jumping paths through the clear air swerving around dusty and solid raised slaughtered cried every night-they move through and pull at your reflexes a lost day lost to memory only a resisdual that comes up in dreams and I can`t remember if I dreamt it or it really happened or theres a messenger from some other place warning the wrong dreamer about unavoidable disaster the striving shock panic and rage of an escape artist`s last performance or the suicide of an obsessive in the headline of a man awaiting execution

Down the ladder: Waking at night

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.75
Weighted score: 5.2086053
Overall Rank: 4481
Posted: June 26, 2004 8:16 AM PDT; Last modified: June 26, 2004 8:16 AM PDT
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[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 26-Jun-04/7:20 PM | Reply
quite nice - I would have made a few different line break choices, but really - a small thing.
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