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Tommorrow (Free verse) by moonlightdance
I'm too tired to be I'll let the world gel over For a while I'd like a magic vial One drop the problems solved The world will cheer And I'll Wake up Nothing is that simple Show your dimples Always smile It only lasts so long It only lasts until tommorrow The truth is quickly setting From a world of clouds Why do we block out? Our chance at something Whats wrong with reality It hurts and now I see But I know It only lasts until tommorrow Don't blink Time rushes by too fast to think Just let things gel around you Don't waste time waiting It only lasts until tommorrow A grain of salt, of sand In a sea of dreams I don't belong But it couldn't last forever Time corrodes With one great splash We'll be washed away Tommorrow

Up the ladder: Homeless
Down the ladder: Ein Kampf

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5808
Posted: June 24, 2004 8:37 AM PDT; Last modified: June 24, 2004 8:37 AM PDT
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Comments:
[10] hbhpoems @ 134.241.46.98 | 24-Jun-04/2:26 PM | Reply
Awsome poem! You are a very creative writer. Nice on the playing of words
[7] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 | 24-Jun-04/3:56 PM | Reply
I love the immediacy of great moments, the throwing off of caution. But I think you have dwelt on it too long in this poem. Brevity seems in order, especially for this topic. Good thoughts.
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