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A Wishful Way Of Life (Other) by Blindpoetry
The fire place forces itself a home for the sound The room is silent after the whistle The forest is silent after the fall of leaves The lake forces itself a home for the landing The room is silent after the whistle Suddenly, the train roars across the room as man-made transportation The lake forces itself a home for the landing Shingles fly as the river flows Suddenly, the train roars across the room as man-made transportation The river flows across the edge of the forest as natures gift Shingles fly as the river flows Leaves soar as the train passes The river flows across the edge of the forest as natures gift The forest is silent after the fall of leaves Leaves soar as the train passes The fire place forces itself a home for the sound

Up the ladder: Fire

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.1666665
Weighted score: 5.0448236
Overall Rank: 7002
Posted: June 10, 2004 11:01 PM PDT; Last modified: June 10, 2004 11:01 PM PDT
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[4] god'swife @ 4.232.69.35 | 11-Jun-04/8:48 AM | Reply
Very interesting structure. Cold and analytical. Chose better words.
[n/a] Blindpoetry @ 68.226.128.193 > god'swife | 11-Jun-04/9:48 AM | Reply
It's called a Pantoum...
A very hard way to write a poem - I'm not suprised that this got a low rating. eh
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