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screaming in silence (Free verse) by siyado
tedious morn on wasted limbs pass the empty hours of nothing sworn to live mine by these high machines yet a decade and a catalytic thought behind screaming in silence so no one hears screaming in silence and bleeding dry tears tired eyes in circles sweep the spaces of a burgeoning psychosis must in every passing moment see only the darker side of things screaming in silence so no one hears screaming in silence and braving the fears keep on diseased and strayed contemplate possible destinations- above the dreamful skies, in tedious rooms within the self, upon the grave screaming in silence so no one hears screaming in silence lend me your ears

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.75
Weighted score: 5.7395887
Overall Rank: 1824
Posted: May 23, 2004 8:14 AM PDT; Last modified: May 23, 2004 8:14 AM PDT
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[10] zodiac @ 65.161.41.48 | 23-May-04/9:26 AM | Reply
When you're "screaming in silence" is your mouth actually producing some kind of, I don't know, anti-sound that is inaudible to everyone, or are you just screaming out loud somewhere really far away from other people?

If your answer is the first one, how do you know the sound you're not producing is a scream? What if it's more like, say, a moan - or a pleasant sustained middle A sharp?

Or what if you're just holding your mouth really wide and slowly exhaling while people passing on the street wonder what the heck you're doing?
[n/a] siyado @ 203.76.248.217 > zodiac | 24-May-04/5:01 AM | Reply
by screaming in silence i meant i could be talking to someone face to face or enjoying a game of pool or flawlessly executing arpeggios on my guitar and no one would notice. i know it's unreasonable to ask to be heard by someone when i'm doing this but a few people actually do hear me. you're obviously not one of them ;)
[10] sliver @ 63.190.81.32 | 24-May-04/9:15 PM | Reply
Great! I love it. Especially the way you closed it.
[10] Lifeboatman @ 202.163.200.75 | 28-May-04/8:45 PM | Reply
maybe I am just biased.. hehe.. 10
[9] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.130.62.63 | 29-May-04/5:00 PM | Reply
Bang your shed... Heavy metal drives me sad.
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