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black and blue (Free verse) by erickvisions
Whats wrong now? "Im seeing things" Seeing things? "In my dreams Fields of dancing nooses All are loosened And set to kill All are real Cause I can hear them laughing Laughing at me I see a man painting a noose around his own neck He jumps from the tree his life is attached to I see a man black and blue The painting is so beautiful black and blue" Kid look deeper Tell me what you see. "Through fields of black and blue with streams of crimson running through I see me and I see you Dangling from trees and there’s nothing we can do Black and blue." I remember when I would dream of the grandest things But now all I see are smoke stacks and blood baths In hues of black and blue.

Up the ladder: Perfectly Okay
Down the ladder: Forgotten

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 8091
Posted: May 18, 2004 11:22 PM PDT; Last modified: May 18, 2004 11:22 PM PDT
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[10] zodiac @ 67.240.155.84 | 19-May-04/3:15 AM | Reply
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[n/a] deleted user @ 24.222.81.233 | 19-May-04/1:08 PM | Reply
How many damn visions does erick get?
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