regarding some deleted poem... |
30-Mar-04/6:37 PM |
I love this. Thanks for welcoming me to poemranker!
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Re: Over you by tre |
6-Apr-04/5:46 PM |
Heh TR I think it's kind of funny... and the line "I hate that you can even make my rhyme." is appropriate for this poem as you usually don't rhyme :)
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regarding some deleted poem... |
6-Apr-04/5:47 PM |
I think the first stanza flows well, has a nice beat to it...
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regarding some deleted poem... |
6-Apr-04/5:49 PM |
The last two stanzas are what really make it for me, and yeah the lines should be broken up differently, but I mentally just kind of split them where I felt the natural break should be... the weird line breaks certainly don't prevent the pattern of it from coming out, especially near the end, because it's so well done there :)
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Re: Cabbagetown will miss you by tre |
8-Apr-04/9:59 PM |
oh my dear it is so long... I also think it can be cleaned up, possibly by making the lines more of a standard length... it's jumbly when there's one really long line followed by something so short... however, there is some good imagery and description going on... I think towards the end though all the particulars started to confuse me, I got a little lost up in them instead of the meaning behind the writing...
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Re: lost memories by ggawrysi |
11-Apr-04/10:29 PM |
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Re: "How Often, Under Starry Skies" by anastomosis |
11-Apr-04/10:31 PM |
As a philosophy major, I really enjoy the topic of this. <grin> Good job.
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Re: A bar without alcohol by tre |
13-Apr-04/8:22 PM |
I think this poem is hilarious in weird ways. For doing such a good job with a topic such as the gym, I give it.. a TEN!
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