| Re: Reality by ThoughtfulSoul |
5-Aug-02/10:15 AM |
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I like the poem. I'm not bitchy or rude like most of the people I have seen on this site. The poem could use a little work, which is why i didn't give you a higher score. I wrote poetry similar to this when I was starting out years ago, and even know, one or two of this style will slip out. Perhaps if you added some punctuation in the right places, it would help give the poem a bit more "kick", so to speak. Many poets use punctuation to signify pauses, breaks, and stops. Good job though, I enjoyed it.
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5-Aug-02/6:25 PM |
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this poem fucking sucks. it's stupid as hell and has no real merit or value. my 2-year-old nephew writes better.
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| Re: I Hate You by mytenderrage |
5-Aug-02/6:37 PM |
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Don't listen to a damn thing these assholes say. This poem is beautiful because you wrote it to express something inside of you. The best quality a poem can have is honesty, and yours is seeping with it. A poem doesn't have to have a bunch of metaphors or long complicated words to be good. A poem has to send out a message. Good work, and much love. Take care. Besides, I read Dark Angels poetry, AND THEY ALL SUCK!!!
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| Re: School girls lovely school girls by ==Doylum |
5-Aug-02/6:47 PM |
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Thanks for your comment. It's nice to know that people who are jealous of actual talent leave low scores and mean comments. Maybe you can find some solice in those pretty school girls eh? lol. grow up, you fucking wanker. *skipping and giggling back home*
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5-Aug-02/8:10 PM |
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You people are funny as hell! Keep it coming please!!
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5-Aug-02/8:19 PM |
Poets have made up words. Look at Lewis Carroll. If you don't know who that is, look it up and learn. The Knight IS the fallen soldier. Actually READ the poem before you make a comment. Verbose means adding too many words, and sometimes people confess too much. I would have said the same thing if I had said "a verbose confession", except im adding the description at the end of the sentence. I used "Fin'lly" because I fucking felt like and also because it is a valid way to use it. Why? Because poetry does not follow the conventional rules of an essay, a report, or a story. That's why it's poetry.
Stick that up your pipe and smoke it, bitch.
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5-Aug-02/8:23 PM |
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and about the word "adourning"? IT IS A WORD. I just misspelled it you asswipe. Look up Dictionary.com, and the word Adorn. Its there.
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5-Aug-02/8:25 PM |
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My name is funny? Im glad I amuse you. Not half as funny as Agemo. Sounds like a venereal disease.
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5-Aug-02/8:32 PM |
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I have had my poetry stolen before asshole. Maybe you don't feel the necessity since no one would steal your shitty poetry to begin with. LOL.
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5-Aug-02/9:37 PM |
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whatever darling. i find this rather amusing. besides, it's my poem, i can take my own liberties. you don't like it, shove it.
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5-Aug-02/9:39 PM |
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lol whatever you say, darling. ^_~ thanks for giving me a laugh tonight. I appreciate it.
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5-Aug-02/9:41 PM |
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and the funniest part is...you ranting on me for using the word wrong when the only problem was....I misspelled too and put TO instead. dumb fucker.
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6-Aug-02/8:38 PM |
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I agree with the above noter. One or two spelling mistakes can be overlooked. Nobody's perfect. But the amount you have really kills the poem.
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6-Aug-02/8:38 PM |
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Wow. This is very nice. I love it.
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| Re: Regrets, No More by writteninskin |
6-Aug-02/9:15 PM |
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there's nothing wrong with wanting to feel needed and loved.
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| Re: Regrets, No More by writteninskin |
6-Aug-02/10:56 PM |
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Are you stupid? re-read it please. The poem does not discuss glorifying this state, but being able to overcome it and life without the need to feel loved by someone. geez man....wake the fuck up. Thats why the poem is called "REGRETS, NO MORE"....
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| Re: Regrets, No More by writteninskin |
6-Aug-02/10:56 PM |
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