Re: Secret Dream-Thoughts of a Married Man by Bethy |
4-Aug-05/1:53 PM |
I like it - the subject matter hits home. Honest and sad without being weepy. I stumbled over one line: "If you only knew what my eyes think"... The rest was concrete, but that was kind of abstract. Thanks for sharing
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Re: a comment on If I Wrote The Perfect Poem by toward |
12-Sep-03/1:48 PM |
Yeah, in thinking about your previous comment, I was wondering how it would be if I just left out those last lines. Somehow, I wanted to convey that I wasn't truly convinced of the stuff above... but I think maybe you're right. Thanks
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Re: a comment on If I Wrote The Perfect Poem by toward |
12-Sep-03/1:25 PM |
wasn't really trying to be funny at the end - was looking for a way to wrap it up - thanks for the comment
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Re: A Fistful of Haiku in Yellow by HaikuMofo |
12-Sep-03/12:30 PM |
The title is great - Clint should be reading these
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Re: let's pretend that we can write! by val |
12-Sep-03/12:28 PM |
valid points, some witty parts - seems a bit bulletproof, though. "My poetic commentary on bad poetry was intentionally not that great"
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