regarding some deleted poem...	20-May-03/8:46 PM
Nice job. It sez ruf copy so i hope to see he final 1 comin soon
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Jun-03/11:28 AM
Wait i'm confused....y is it called mystery?? 8
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Jun-03/10:47 PM
Not bad, i disagree with you jim, it is anything but perfect, but good nonetheless
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Jun-03/5:32 PM
"the sun shines through my tears and burns away all my fears" Brilliant, truly brilliant
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jun-03/12:11 PM
Finally you write something not about love...i think its pretty good but it could you some more work, you should think about doing maybe a second draft
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jun-03/7:51 AM
Too unoriginal
Re: Nothing you can say by Rodavlas	13-Jul-03/5:56 PM
"Maybe it's time that i shut up I think if you shut up it would be best for all of us.
Re: Provacation by J.B. Manning	20-Aug-03/3:54 PM
-7-
Re: Red by Brittanyy	21-Sep-03/6:42 AM
'that lonliness is my only companion' - nice line -8-
Re: Simple Can (Relic) by Liver by Shardik	21-Sep-03/6:45 AM
hahahahhahahhahahahaha
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Sep-03/6:47 AM
[X] AABB rhyming scheme [_] About romantic love [_] About poetry-writing [_] About suicide or self-mutilation [_] Arbitrary indentation [_] Arbitrary line breaks [_] Autobiographical but in the third person [_] Clerical errors [X] Cliched imagery (staring out of window, pits of despair) [_] Cliched rhymes (love/above etc.) [X] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments [_] Devoid of rhyme [_] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices [_] Devoid of wond'rous or fantastical imagery [_] Drug references [_] Elves, unicorns, etc. [_] Exclamation points used to mark 'the funny bits' [_] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [X] 'Lyrics' [_] Melodramatic [_] Naively religious or superstitious [_] Obsessed with femininity [_] Overabundance of ellipses [_] Overuse of 'depression' words (putrid, wretched, darkness, etc) [_] Pointedly unanswered questions [_] Protagonist has a smug name [_] Rage against the machine [_] References to the author's 'social life' [_] Repetition of a single word or phrase to the point of nausea [_] Sanctimoniously moral [X] Self-obsessed [_] Sentimental [_] Thesaurophilia [_] Use of internet shorthand or emoticons
Re: Tales From The Outhouse by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	12-Feb-04/3:53 PM
-5-
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Feb-04/11:38 AM
not completely awful