Re: swimming by lexicon	30-May-02/9:34 PM
sunshiny isn't very poetic.
regarding some deleted poem...	30-May-02/9:37 PM
Something is askew in the metre of this poem... I'm none too sure about it.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-May-02/7:23 PM
That poem is a pantoum. It's a really neat style in which a rhythm is created by repeating entire lines rather than just a certain sound. Look it up!
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Jun-02/5:14 PM
It's very good. In some places, the metre is off which I feel takes away from the poem. If you were just to polish up the rhythm in a few spots, this would truly be a work of art.
Re: hatred by yarlgrenn	2-Jun-02/5:17 PM
I like this poem. You have a good sense of internal rhyme which, coupled with alliteration, really gives this poem its magic.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Jun-02/5:18 PM
Well written, but all of the characteristics of old age are totally cliche... or is that deliberate?
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-02/9:43 PM
That poem is a haiku in spirit if not in form. I have considered adding to it, but feel that it stands on its own.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-02/9:44 PM
And his didn't even involve a verb. Thanks for the support!
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-02/9:53 PM
the only line I have ever written about the guy who used to hit me.I will finish the poem when I figure out what to say.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-02/9:55 PM
I'll look it up. I'm honestly not sure, which is rare because I'm incredibly picky about spelling. I frequently mix up little things like that, however, because most of my education was in French... There will be more soon...
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-02/9:57 PM
limonade -- 27-Jul-02, 09:46 PM *laughs* That is the best comment ever. Once, I was in Mexico playing a game with a bunch of friends, running in the grass. I slipped on a mango and landed on my ass. They're slippery, you know. Very juicy. ;)
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-02/9:58 PM
m really quite fond of carefully mixed allusions. I suppose that as someone who has read a lot, I am entranced by the modernist estoteric style and I love a broad range of allusions that would confuse the average reader...
Re: A Passing Love by razorgrin	27-Jul-02/10:04 PM
They call me the wild rose... Well, that's what this poem makes me think.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Jul-02/10:24 PM
In a manner. More like realising that masturbation is better than bad sex.