| Re: Midnight Dream by Katie |
7-Oct-02/8:25 AM |
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Naughty, naughty! Do your parents know you do this in the dark corners of your bedroom at night after they've gone to sleep?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
7-Oct-02/9:05 AM |
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there's something funny about this, yet truly idiotic. i guess the 2 go hand in hand at times. get rid of the first stanza and this will be better. "that's cabbage for you" is a classic line.
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| Re: The First Poem by jrtails |
9-Oct-02/10:35 AM |
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LukeHanney might be paranoid and overzealous, but this works nicely. it's nice when something catches you off guard with its
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| Re: Snack for the Shameless by New Life Drug |
9-Oct-02/10:37 AM |
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the title is the best part. i thought it was going to have something to do with
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| Re: song of the birds by rainbow |
9-Oct-02/11:26 AM |
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something tells me the hawk isn't in pain but is announcing to his buddies that you're going to be dinner. you have "the" twice in the second stanza.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
15-Oct-02/11:33 AM |
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the last 8 lines are very nice. the beginning could be a little smoother. there's something about it that chunks along a little too clunkily.
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