Re: a comment on Fillamayer! by smiffy84	26-Jun-05/4:12 AM
I know what you mean, and I do try to avoid messing with the structure of sentences as much as I can, but pobody's nerfect, and besides, if Shakespeare didn't see a problem with it, who am I to argue with him?
Re: a comment on Kiss Me by smiffy84	20-Jun-05/7:52 AM
this "Written account" of which you speak was exactly what I was aiming for. I wanted a stream of consciousness- laced interior monologue, detailing what I did to myself, and how it felt. Yes, I used creative liscence (I have never tried to slit my own throat, and I never did it with the intent of dying), but this was my way of dealing with something that has had a profound and continuing impact on my life. "Subjects like this call for subtlety", I'm sorry, but unless you have actually cut yourself, you have no place telling me or anyone else how such things "Should" be addressed. How a person deals with a situation like this is entirely up to them, there is no wrong answer, there is no "Should". The fact that you se fit to dictate to me how to address something so important and personal to me, with, so far as my knowledge stretches, no experience of it yourself, I find insulting in the extreme. You are entitled to your opinion, and your own way of dealing with things, please allow me mine.
Re: a comment on Kiss Me by smiffy84	19-Jun-05/11:30 AM
Right, so many misconceptions here, my own fault, I should imagine, but still. This poem is not about kisses, foreplay, or anything like that. It is written about the period in my life where I self- harmed. The "Friend" is the knife, the "Kiss" is the actual act of cutting my arm, the fire is exactly what it says on the tin; I would heat the knife in the fire before cutting myself to reduce the risk of infection, and also to increase the sensation when i cut. Nothing sexual in there, unless you're into that kind of thing
Re: a comment on A limerick by smiffy84	19-Jun-05/11:26 AM
You would not have heard this when you were twelve, because I only wrote it last October during a University lecture at the University of Wolverhampton. I don't doubt that very similar limericks must exist, let's face it, it can be argued that all limericks are pretty much the same, but this one is all my own
Re: word splatter by nentwined	18-Jun-05/9:57 AM
Hmmmmm, i recal this poem in the Poetry Corner forum on www.braingell.com, why bother with the shower? Just hold your breath