on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi
15 Jun 2005, 8:52 PM
Perhaps there are a few that can be simplified into each other, but then again, maybe not. Maybe I just don't like the style as much as I do others, I'm not quite sure. Try reading it with thoughts of how to bring personalities together maybe? Or compare the personalities, instead of questioning each one individually. Your call
replying on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi
15 Jun 2005, 7:30 PM
Ah, you misunderstood me. Not the length of the poem itself, I liked that, I mean the question/yes thing. It's good, but perhaps too much of it. Oh well, as the writer, take it anyway you want with it, just a suggestion.
on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi
15 Jun 2005, 7:18 PM
Hmmm... I rather liked that actually. I believe the questions and yes answer got a bit repetitive, but I can see that was kind of the point as well. Perhaps there is a way to cut down on it? But, anyway, good job.