Re: The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	15-Jun-05/8:52 PM
Perhaps there are a few that can be simplified into each other, but then again, maybe not. Maybe I just don't like the style as much as I do others, I'm not quite sure. Try reading it with thoughts of how to bring personalities together maybe? Or compare the personalities, instead of questioning each one individually. Your call
Re: a comment on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	15-Jun-05/7:30 PM
Ah, you misunderstood me. Not the length of the poem itself, I liked that, I mean the question/yes thing. It's good, but perhaps too much of it. Oh well, as the writer, take it anyway you want with it, just a suggestion.
Re: The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	15-Jun-05/7:18 PM
Hmmm... I rather liked that actually. I believe the questions and yes answer got a bit repetitive, but I can see that was kind of the point as well. Perhaps there is a way to cut down on it? But, anyway, good job.