on A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus
18 Sep 2004, 4:24 AM
Your Mum and Dad would be proud...
on some deleted poem
18 Sep 2004, 4:40 AM
The more I read over this poem, the more my emotions are stirred and I'm reminded of a lost love. Your writing is heartfelt and very real - loved it.
on some deleted poem
18 Sep 2004, 3:56 AM
Very cool lyrics, luv to hear the song...ahhh, the good old days!
on some deleted poem
18 Sep 2004, 4:00 AM
Don't be put off by my meagre vote. Lyrics can be hard to judge when not backed by music.
on some deleted poem
18 Sep 2004, 4:13 AM
You and I have something in common - we write as we experience and feel things. I understand completely what you mean in your poem, but it kinda rambles a little. Understandably, it's hard to sum up an experience that leaves one feeling lost, but perhaps you could shorten the length of the poem by altering the layout. Does that make any sense?
on Friends by Sirens_Voice
19 Sep 2004, 3:37 AM
I really liked this poem, especially the lines, "We made jokes and we stole glances. Wished we were each others heart enchantment."
on some deleted poem
19 Sep 2004, 3:42 AM
The poem held my attention until the last four lines. It kinda loses it's momentum. However, I think it's pretty good.