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regarding some deleted poem... 31-May-04/4:21 AM
This is very good, with vivid imagery.I've heard the word "transmogrified" used in relation to change from one substance to another--like dinosaur bone to stone, for example, so I think to use it in a description of conjuring works really well. I have only one suggestion-- I'd change "I'd hope" in the repeating line to "I hope" because the poem implies that the spell is taking place in the present, but "I'd hoped" suggests that the hopping is over.
regarding some deleted poem... 31-May-04/4:22 AM
woops--I meant hoping, not hopping, haha. No rabbits coming out of hats in your poem. :)
Re: For Antony's unborn by Mona Lisa 31-May-04/4:30 AM
Beautifl ode to an unborn child--I love this line:

Close to faraway from everyone
Re: Soldiers (Terzanelle) by Angeline 31-May-04/7:39 AM
Thank you Shin Shuu for the comment and the suggestion on "very hot." I'll think about it and keep the idea, but get rid of "very," which is a blah word. I'm usually pretty good with editing my poems, but that one slipped by me. Good call.
Re: The Snow Queen by Angeline 31-May-04/12:50 PM
Thanks for the vote and comment. Your suggestion is good. This poem is one in a series I'm doing about fairy tales--maybe it follows the story line too closely. And I haven't heard of Carol Shields, but I'll read her. :)


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