poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Call of the Marine by ggawrysi.

hypatia2 May 2004

I like most of this, but think "jungle" could be desert - more current - the Iraq war.
Suggestions only:
muscles with a knot -> muscles with knots
truth. You -> truth - you
The last line irks me because there is no victory in my opinion.