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The True Irony (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom

Written by Jason ~ James Subconsciously I lay conscious Thinking of This Unaware of my being Drifting from myself Yet fully aware of my pain Chaining me to my misery How can this be? Such Irony I drift away This Suffering Lying perfectly still Buried in Memories Burned Hurting of a love that never existed So why do I miss it Praying for a happiness that can never be Dreaming Then I wake up To Watch the Shattering Some time later Beneath the Silence Screaming of a burning sun There is this Hunger Deafening my already burst ears Forcing me to swallow These fears are merely doubts Doubts I can't put down Closing my eyes Wide Shut To see Beyond this Point With my mouth Wide Open Trying to Scream No Sound arises Curtains Close Lights Fade And I wake from this dream

SupremeDreamer 29-Apr-04/2:45 PM
This poem is below your over-all writing ability, lil-furry-poofball.. did you regress? Cmon man, would you add some spice and atleast get the tip of my toes to fuckin sizzle?




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