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Radiation Reflections (Free verse) by sarah

raging, remorseful, and rancid radiation in action even twenty years later it acts just like it hates her it abates her it agitates her it won't debate her and it will destroy her secondary unplanned damned diseases eating away at her as they pleases which of the organs will next get the wheezes? and which will be "it" to filch her to the freezers? it all berates me badly now the daughter she endowed so humble, bad, and proud i remember well holding her hair as she puked from the chemo that kept her here it allowed me a mother and kills her with care not to die with a shotgun, but dragged with despair raging, remorseful, and rancid radiation in action even twenty years later it acts just like it hates her it abates her it agitates her it won't debate her and it will destroy her

Shuushin 23-Apr-04/8:22 PM
I think your search for alliteration and rhyme put a slight, likely unintentional, comedic twist to the thing.

It is difficult to take such a thing seriously when it rhymes too conveniently.

The only examples I can think of involve war.




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