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reflection (Free verse) by xunitedx

we listen to preachers, presidents, and teachers hoping they tell us the meaning we hide from strange creatures under the bleachers just to live longer while dreaming we wander through valleys, back streets, and alleys searching for what is the truth we attend ballys, live concerts, and rallies just to find innocence left us in youth

Shuushin 20-Apr-04/2:01 PM
sure it rhymes (the T is silent) - that it isn't the same foot makes it a bit awkwark though. Maybe you should capitalize it to make it more of a, uh, what you call a - proper noun so the fair reader doesn't have to take out the magic decoder ring.

This is what messing with standard rules like for capitalization and punctuation do to a poem - it makes readers second-guess stuff (especially on a forum like this).

Chalk it up as a datapoint. The word in that place doesn't really effect the thing overall anyway.





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