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when do dreams fade? (Free verse) by francis nor capule

life is shallow and unbearable nothing seems to go my way every little thing a mess, a lovers kiss is empty moonlights are cold the night freezes me over and wine doesn't taste as good my thoughts a mess nothing seems straight the stars are dim , and night fades my dreams faded when i lost you pushed you from me, drove you away and the emptiness of memories kept gnaws at me like a bad hangover after friday the day you left my soul departed it stays this way still...

hypatia 16-Apr-04/1:36 PM
At first I expected this to end as a slur on maudlin feelings being gushed without any preparation, but now I see I'll have to write that verse myself.




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