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hoping (Free verse) by francis nor capule

what are the things that i have learned? i have learned that a heart is fragile ; so is truth. nothing is binding, not even youth. that the price of peace, is forever high . and love that is weak, would make you cry that people lie , and don't mean what they say . men would cheat , and shoo you away. but somehow through all this, there is hope i see. perhaps just enough for you and me. with enough patience and caring; probably tons of love. perhaps the sun would indeed shine, from up above. so i thank you, for finding me. or was it me who found you? serendpity , did it's part . and bought you close to heart...

hypatia 13-Apr-04/12:41 PM
s1 - s3 flow pretty well. I think that when you start a pattern like this, you commit yourself to follow it through to the end. When you change patterns midway through, it sends a reader wandering.




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