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My Pain 2004 (Free verse) by ToMuchPain04

My Pain 2004 I do not know why i cannot deal with this pain I do not know what its trying to gain Is it trying to drive me insane? Or maybe elevate me to another plane No matter how hard I try sometimes i feel like i need to die To escape this long nasty sword through my heart Pretty soon it will rip me apart After all is said and done I will not have it in me to have any fun So before i get down and keep taking this Licken I feel like giving pain one last ass kickin

hypatia 10-Apr-04/10:00 AM
The last line is good. The rest is a play on rhymes, too many words for what it says.




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