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''*Night*'' (Free verse) by youngweirdo

The wind is cold,but the air is hot, A mist seeps down and sweeps people up. The night has came, The moon is clear, The sky is dark beneath the fear. I hear a voice inside my dream, Its saying things which make me scream, They make me tremble, My body and soul. And its all in the night, When the wind is cold.

babbit11 17-Aug-02/9:23 PM
I am not sure what you are getting at with the ** around the title. In addition, the images you create are a bit confusing. If it is misting, how can we see the moon? The sky is dark-- you established that with the title. Has the night came, as in spent its wad? Or, is this just a misuse of language. These are just a few errors that really hurt the poem.




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