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A Little Further (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom

This page is full of divits and dents From writing so fierce, over feelings so intense That they left echos through out the book These words make the next that much more broken

nentwined 8-Apr-04/4:40 PM
divits -> divets
through out -> throughout

I like the idea, less so the execution. With four lines, the second is awkward and the fourth is just a tongue twister.




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