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Wartner (Free verse) by unouluvme

Poised atop my finger, steaming, cold, and frozen the calloused surface surrenders to the blue foam aplicater the warning on the label "could cause serious burns" scares me half to death. my beautiful finger scarred for life the most important one after all without this finger which one would flip the birdie? but the ugly wart so vile and unsightly annoyed me even more 15 seconds, the stinging pain but a good cause it was for 2 weeks passed, me waiting impatiantly it shrunk, died, passed away, my finger beautiful once more. *imagine me showing you* (remember, this is my middle finger were talking about):)

Shuushin 2-Apr-04/8:52 PM
That last bit has to go.

And if you are going to offer up a rewrite, you should especially fix the spelling errors - there really is no good excuse for that.




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