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The Day The World Blew Away (Glosa) by OfaRevolutionAJD

I wonder where everything goes When everything fades away Do we still exist? Or do we decay? I wonder what happens when the world blows away Do we blow away with it? Or do we stay? In a world of emptiness Nothing is sad Nothing is happy Everything is blank No fake smiles No more lies This is the day the world blew away Everyone is hollow in someway For we no longer exist We just decay The day the world blew away...

hypatia 2-Apr-04/6:38 AM
Too many redundant lines. A good thought with a touch of ambiguity.




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