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Love in Winter Storage (Lyric) by Russell

My love goes lurking, like a sparrow (on tiny, nervous springs), who takes each seed, each bead of water as fête, well set for kings. My love goes stealing, like a squirrel who fidgets and then sings of grains he hoards as they grow fatter till cat’s distemper stings. My love goes burrowing, like worm, who “Dirt for dowry!” sings; and yet I know the squalid mounds to which his harem clings. My love goes languishing, like laurel with roots asleep in slings: from here till May, a sullen ember, whose mood now weaves on wings.

richa 25-Mar-04/5:21 AM
Quite a nice sound (apart from the sings/distemper stings forced rhyme).

Not sure sparrows lurk though.




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