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urge purged (Free verse) by caffrey

I am your smiling source of envy polished teeth and all a metal bite on your exposed neck the taste of bitterness so sweet I am your snarling source of grief try as you might not a cell to spare in your haste to bemuse the murderous spirit screams in jealous shoes swallowing pride one morsel at a time I am your crying insides your burning need to impress your uncomfortable hands when you feel their eyes yes judging always judging I am your blood cloud through the plastic window of a rusty spike because you finally gave in alone I feed today you died

Shuushin 22-Mar-04/7:29 PM
I don't "get" the last stanza, but I like the rest quite a bit. I hangs just on that edge of tongue-in-cheek. works for me.




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