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Puritans (Free verse) by zodiac

A windy warm summer night like this is no good for prohibition - it unravels the dreams of Christian women (rungs on a rope-ladder, a scarecrow hung in a broom-closet) and pulls them in their formidable night-dresses out into quiet hallways, to kitchens animate with moonlight, stirs their tongues on the cool white skin in the sugar-bowl, long and tenderly as greedy kisses.

hypatia 20-Mar-04/3:40 PM
Then why the (. . . )? and how is sugar in a bowl like skin? It almost works because of the last line. And what makes her nightdress formidable or its formidableness important? Yes, I'm picky, seeing as I know what you mean now.




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