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Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

She talks quietly with the elderly couple, seeming healthy except for her rubberized hands: Small bendable fingers, look alikes, no fancy prosthetics, stainless hooks, or muscle triggers. It took both of her hands to manuever the fork just to pick a single beet slice. I watched her a moment more, paid the bill, and went outside to watch a father showing his son how to hold a stone for skipping.

zodiac 13-Mar-04/12:23 PM
Yours is better, but too hurried. Does that make sense?




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