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Brethren (Free verse) by richa

The trick of the dandelion clock: To disperse in the wind, grey seeds to interchange like girls, plain as a sugar's beet, that dance, each hiding a Newton.

zodiac 9-Mar-04/1:53 PM
'clock:' - with a colon.

I like 'like girls' - without 'the'.

I don't get the punctuation in the last line.




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