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Passion is (Free verse) by fevriere

Outside I am watching futilely for a very long time and life goes round like prose and just as "I DEMAND to know the Narrator" I know that all will c o l lapsePASSION ISasPASSION DOES and everything wrong (secrets spring up like wildflower weeds, coughing up accidental clandestine blooms) soon everyone will know and someone will taste the whispering song people will know I thinkthatPASSION ISas passion does so "STROKE ME " I admit.

richa 28-Feb-04/3:11 AM
The first few lines show a certain potential. 'Outside I am watching and life goes round/ like prose and just as'

The rest is a bit off, but reading the entire submissions of a day. Something like this sticks out.




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