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Digital Remembery
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Free verse
) by
ifni
capturing the transient in spinning light, the ones and zeroes of quantum meaning, capturing the fleeting flute of her voice on my spinning plastic disc. 9-9-01 JV
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6-Apr-02/8:38 PM
hhmmm...i like this a lot a lot! you have a very interesting concept going on. could i suggest a change in line breaks though? maybe try this:
capturing the transient in
spinning light,
the ones and zeroes
of quantum meaning,
capturing the fleeting flute
of her voice on my
spinning
plastic
disc.
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