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Digital Remembery (Free verse) by ifni

capturing the transient in spinning light, the ones and zeroes of quantum meaning, capturing the fleeting flute of her voice on my spinning plastic disc. 9-9-01 JV

roses are read 6-Apr-02/8:38 PM
hhmmm...i like this a lot a lot! you have a very interesting concept going on. could i suggest a change in line breaks though? maybe try this:
capturing the transient in
spinning light,
the ones and zeroes
of quantum meaning,
capturing the fleeting flute
of her voice on my
spinning
plastic
disc.




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