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I never Knew..... (Other) by SkateBoardGurl5799

Push....Those were the first words I heard when i first came into this world. I saw My mother and I knew she would be the best. 13 Months later i said my first words. Wuv you.I saw my mom crying and I thought She was sad but she was happy. 4 years later I got a dad. He was ok but he hit My mom so he left. I never Knew i would end up this way it just happened.(dont ask why) for my 7th birthday, i got a cake with a barbie on top of it. I loved that cake. For my 11th Birthday i got a cupcake. For my 15th Birthday i got a I.O.U I never knew that for my 16th Birthday that i would meet this guy named Rob. He was so Special to me,He was also so faithful to me. I never knew that 10 months later i would be on crack,beer,acid,and also on the streets. My mom dishonored me and so did everyone else that i thought i once knew and loved. I slept on a Bench... and Rob? He was out with another Girl. I met this other guy named Andy. He got me An Apartment and back on my feet. I was also Clean for 3 months until.....I never knew that i would be back on drugs and also 9 months pregnant! I had the Baby aready,And the first words my baby heard were Push... And i hope that last words it will ever hear wont be.............I never knew

Tarquin De La Bog 14-Aug-02/6:05 PM
This is awful. 2. The structure is nice but it is far too long and in need of a larger vocabulary.




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