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Triptych: Rural (Haiku) by lastobelus

Fallowing --------- crow rises, still black boot into clod of turned earth recoil, break, reload. Racing the Train ---------------- gunned under the bitch hissing, face flat out ugly with a brand new fear. Family Reunion ------- squalling bee-stung child. Uncles lean on their cars, beer takes away the sting.

lastobelus 15-Feb-04/4:54 PM
...uncles lean on cars, their beer
takes away the sting.

-- might actually be better, in terms of the main meaning. Good edit.

However, uncles leaning on THEIR cars is a very personal image for me -- the family reunions at my grandma's house with my father's 13 surviving siblings, their spouses, and a bazillion cousins. So ima gonna hafta leave this one the way she be.




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