SupremeDreamer12 Feb 2004

I like the poem.. but not the linebreaks.. Might I suggest linebreaking it this way?:

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Nowhere but now
here with these last few hours
and this setting sun
by the drinking trees
soaking the breath and
the minutes like water
for life falling and failing
these summer-soft moments
throwing us back to the grass-bed
holding on where we know we will
never be again
with dew drops growing beside
and beneath the forms we have sunk
into the bent-sole grass for these last few
failing hours.
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Blessed with eight.