Shuushin9 Feb 2004

Took me a couple reads to appreciate it, but I like it.

My main hesitation was the many prepositional phrases - having said that, I really want the first line to be:
"After this season of ice is over" - see, another prep phrase, but it seems to flow better, imho.

My ear keeps wanting "warm" to be an adverb, rather than a noun - but somehow it works (as is often the case).

And I'd prefer some specific types of tree and wine and weed.

But, after a few reads, the idea of it convinces me - its a good perspective. Good enough to build a snowman out of -8-