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Triptych: Rural (Haiku) by lastobelus

Fallowing --------- crow rises, still black boot into clod of turned earth recoil, break, reload. Racing the Train ---------------- gunned under the bitch hissing, face flat out ugly with a brand new fear. Family Reunion ------- squalling bee-stung child. Uncles lean on their cars, beer takes away the sting.

zodiac 8-Feb-04/6:38 AM
How about "their beer"? And another word for takes?




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