-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.3 Feb 2004

hey i gave your poem a ten but i think it would be really good if you changed the first line from "Weeks pass by" to "Weeks pass by like charging braves"... it's just that this poem really reminds me of native american culture, and it would be great if you could include it somewhere. I think its a great image to use charging braves as a metaphor for the weeks passing by. Anyway let me know if you decide to include that edit thanks -10-