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Sleepy Geek (Free verse) by razorgrin

It's so hot my soul is sweating and I cry out "Lord I'm gonna slay my stupid neighbours with my +2 short sword of drunk-smiting. I cast "Silence" on their porch to quell their noise,but the stereo has spell resistance +20. It annoys me that I have to do this on a Friday night. I told them I work tomorrow, why do they put me through this shit? So I'll wake up early and go to work, this stuff always happens to me I'ts no fun being the only high-level mage in the service industry.

Shin-Bojangles 11-Aug-02/2:20 AM
Just a couple of little things.
Firstly, unless it's some sorta wacky unique thing, it should be "drunk bane" not smiting. Also, Spell Resistance isn't measureed in bonuses, so just 20 would be fine. Finally, though it is an acceptable synonym, with your use of out-of-game terms in the sentence, it might be more prudent to say "high-level wizardess (or sorcereress)" instead of mage, since the mage classification dosn't really exist tangibly in 3rd Edition.
Sorry! :)




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