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The Upside-Down Frown (Free verse) by fevriere

The upside-down frown smashed quicker than the pulse Into the bitter-sweetest decay, the hottest grey slide A thorn crown, dragged for curiosity, through the focus of eyes plasticated, buried elsewhere.

fevriere 28-Jan-04/6:40 AM
That's great crit. Thank-you. I feel like reduxing now. :)




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