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Doe (Other) by OneFingerAnswer

No candles at your vigil No one at your wake No one was at your side And so no one cried That little girl didn’t dance any more Her only shaking was in her hands Notes didn’t move her feet Under that head hung in defeat No flowers on your grave No name on the stone No one came around As they put you in the ground

richa 18-Jan-04/5:19 AM
Your last one about gayness was too clumsy and didactic.

This one is really good, the tone, much more thoughtful.




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