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Malaysia (Free verse) by Crakyamuni

Mostly managed to chew the chum, misinterpreted nostalgia or dignity for some Elegant denizens of the fifth layer celibate, repent and send messages with a furor like sedatives disdain for the tenement left me empty and innocent but I felt so far away from my lovers and miscreants This is not fantasia, or south central asia, and how can I express the pulse of Malaysia? but as a wayward third word, twice past the oppression, repenting and venting the last one's trangressions

richa 11-Jan-04/12:08 PM
A furor like sedative? both words are kind of opposites.

Likewise trust your belly button is daft.

Other than that love the rhythm and rhyme (although to please the purists perhaps it should make more sense in places)




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