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Give me something (Free verse) by candaliesa

Give me hope, give me love, Give me something I can't shove. Give me happiness, give me joy, Give me something that is not a toy. Give me anger, give me tears, Give me something to remember these years. Give me forever, give me true, Give me all this, and I'll have you 5/13/99

JoyLuck 6-Jan-04/10:59 PM
I give you 6*
Too much "give me" repetition






* just so you don't kill urself




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