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Little Bird (Pimple) by Blindpoetry

Little Bird Floating Around Little Bird Stay with me; safe and sound Little Bird Let your nest be my crown Don't leave me, little bird Or the hunters will get you And you'll be gone without a word Little Bird This may seem a little obsurd Little Bird I love you - You have my word...

richa 23-Dec-03/8:15 AM
(a)bsurd.

Quite good, the bit about loving the bird at the end is daft. The selfishness to keep the bird for yourself, saying the outside world is worse, praising captivity is rather well written.




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