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(untitled) (Free verse) by Mystifying

all the times that we spent together<BR>and then the times we spent apart<BR>we seemed to be closer than could be<BR>but then you broke my heart<BR><BR>you took my hand and seated me in your lap& lt;BR>i looked into oyur eyes and saw somehting was wrong<BR>i got angry before i even knew what was up<BR>the truth unfolded itself..it didnt take long<BR><BR>he told me he loved someone elsehe told me it was his best friend<BR>i hated her from the start<BR>but i was so apathetic i had no strength to defend<BR><BR>the defend that he loved me<BR>so i sat there an stared at him in silence<BR>i felt the anger swell in me<BR>and alls i knew was the violence<BR>< BR>the violence of my reaction suprized even me<BR>i cried and carried on..he must have thought i ws crazy<BR>but he stayed there.. till i was all cried out<BR>he had a look on his face that said, " that didnt faze me"<BR><BR>all of a sudden i got an unbeatable strength<BR>and i punched him as hard as i could<BR>i didnt feel like being there while he just stared<BR>the blood started dripping as i knew it would<BR><BR>i walked away from him<BR>i walked away from our memories, our fights<BR>i walked away from the hurt and all the tears<BR>i walked away from the caresszes so light<BR>< BR>it was over and done<BR>i never wanted to see his face<BR>i cant think of the things he must have done<BR>anytime i wasnt there in any place<BR>

anonymous 19-Sep-01/12:33 AM
"and seated me" -> "and sat me"; "alls I" -> "all I"; Hmm. I know that pain. The rhythm/flow/grammar could use work, though.




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